更新时间:2018-07-29 16:20作者:三水老师
LiHua
【参考答案】
DearMSChen,
I’mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I’mwritingtoapplyforthepositionasastudentvolunteer.
IreallywanttoobtainthisPciousopportunitybecause,byofferingmyservice,Iwillbeabletoimprovemyorganizationalability,communicationskillsaswellasmyconfidenceinspeakingEnglishinpublic.
Asanoutgoinggirl,Igetalongwellwithmyclassmates.Besides,IhavesuchagoodcommandofEnglishthatIamelectedasassistanttomyEnglishteacher.Successfully,IhavelentahelpinghandtoherinseveralEnglishactivitiesofmyclass,whichhavebeenapPciatedbybothteachersandclassmates.
IamsurethatIcanperfectlyliveuptoyourexpectations.Iwillbegratefullifyoucouldgivemeakindconsideration.
Lookingforwardtoyourreply.
Yourstruly,
LiHua
【解析】
试题分析:本篇书面表达属于英文书信,根据提示可知需要结合“英语文化节”的一则招募启事写一封应征邮件。写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读招募启事,弄清招募职位所有信息和要求;2、根据写作要点从三个方面写应征邮件。写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点。
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如IhavesuchagoodcommandofEnglishthatIamelectedasassistanttomyEnglishteacher.运用了so…that…句型,以及定语从句IhavelentahelpinghandtoherinseveralEnglishactivitiesofmyclass,whichhavebeenapPciatedbybothteachersandclassmates.。此外,文章还使用了大量短语,如applyfortheposition,aswellas,inpublic,getalongwellwith,,havesuchagoodcommandof,lentahelpinghandto,liveupto等。插入语Besides,以及副词Successfully的使用使文章内容更具有层次感,也使语言更加连贯。